Guys, it’s not very good. The last 6 or so chapters are excellent, but the writing throughout most of the book, especially in the beginning…just not very good. I don’t even know how to describe what I mean. It almost seems indulgent. Her descriptions are overly theatrical, so much so that she almost loses her grip on her own characters. Lines like these stick out in particular, as examples:
Harry: “Wow, Dudley. Did the dementors blow a new soul into you or something?” (PARAPHRASE)
Ron: “I knew Ginny was lying about that tattoo.” Is Ron really that stupid? He saw Harry without his shirt on every day for six years. No. Rowling is indulging herself.
Hermione: “Oooh, Harry, you look tasty.” Or something to that effect, in reference to the polyjuice potion.
It feels fake to me. And the whole scene with Hagrid and Harry on the motorbike and Hedwig dying and…I don’t even understand what I’m talking about. DOES ANYBODY KNOW WHAT I’M TALKING ABOUT?
“I have spied for you and lied for you, put myself in mortal danger for you. Everything was supposed to be to keep Lily Potter’s son safe. Now you tell me you have been raising him like a pig for slaughter —-“
“But this is touching, Severus,” said Dumbledore seriously. “Have you grown to care for the boy, after all?”
“For him?” shouted Snape. “Expecto Patronum!”
From the tip of his wand burst the silver doe: She landed on the office floor, bounded once across the office, and soared out of the window. Dumbledore watched her fly away, and as her silvery glow faded he turned back to Snape, and his eyes were full of tears.
I’ll be posting things from here fairly often. These people are the gods of H/Hr fanfic. This was adorable. Read it. Srsly, you guys.
Something short and light for a Monday… It’s light, it’s kind of fluffy and it was written in under 30 minutes…so please be kind. Aside from the usual disclaimer (not mine, yadda yadda), this has no nutritional value whatsoever and is inspired by a story written by Lilla Vaughan. I will eventually graduate to longer and meatier fics but for now, enjoy this little tidbit :)
greydawning Title: How to Fake a Platonic Relationship…Or Die Trying Rating: PG Pairing: H/Hr Notes: No particular spoilers but definitely EWE
“Hermione had taken his hand again and was gripping it tightly. He could not look at her, but returned the pressure, now taking deep, sharp gulps of the night air, trying to steady himself, trying to regain control. He should have brought something to give them, and he had not thought of it, and every plant in the graveyard was leafless and frozen. But Hermione raised her wand, moved it in a circle in the air and a wreath of Christmas roses blossomed before them. Harry caught it and laid it on his parents’ grave.
As soon as he stood up, he wanted to leave: he did not think he could stand another moment there. He put his arm around Hermione’s shoulders, and she put hers around his waist, and they turned in silence and walked away through the snow, past Dumbledore’s mother and sister, back towards the dark church and the out-of-sight kissing gate.”—Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows, Godric’s Hollow (via ainako)